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Friday, October 26, 2007

A Frightening Experience Draft-1

One day, after school. I took the bus to go back home. When I got off the bus and walked on my way home. I felt somebody walked behind me. But when I turned back and looked around, no one in sight. So I disapprovingly. As soon as I arrived home, I took a bath. After I taking a bath, I washed my face, I lifted up my head. Then I was so frightened that I couldn't speak out. Because I saw a head pass through the window, and its head was inverted. I wore my clothes and left quickly. I went to bed after I finishing my homework. I felt somebody lie beside me and feeling cold. After a minute, I felt my bed was wavering, and I was sure that was not an earthquake. Because it wavered like a float on the air. Then, I couldn't move my body. Finally, I could endure it no longer. I decided to open my eyes, and I found a pair of eyes, looked at me. I left my bed and went to sleep with my parents. The next day, my mother took me to a temple to worship.

1 Comments:

Blogger Fanny said...

"walked behind me"
should change into
"walking behind me"
"lie beside me "
should change into
"lying beside me "
"that was not an earthquake"
you can plus "it"
"that it was not an earthquake"
", looked at me."
can change into
", looking at me."

2:32 AM  

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