Autobiography part 1 Draft-1
In 1990, a baby was born in Tainan country. That is me. My name is Chia Chin Wang. There are six members in my family. My grandma is a conservative and sountryside person. My father is a democratic and simple person. My mother is a career woman and amiable. When I study in nursery school, my mother always repeated to me that I must be polite and honest to other children. Sometime, If I do something wrong, they would strict point out the mistakes so that I can be corrected. My sister studies in the Tainan technicality university. I am happy to born in a healthy and harmonious environment that I have a kindness family. My brother was to do military service.
I like to play volleyball, and read outside reading. I used to play volleyball with my friends on the weekend. And, sometime I will go to the library with my classmate. I will borrow books form the library. I think read some inspiring book can help me put aside the pressure and make me awake.

7 Comments:
Reading is a good way to relax.
The more you read the more konwledge you get.
*And, sometime I will go to the library with my classmate.* should change to *And, sometimes I will go to the library with my classmates.*
"My brother was to do military service."應該放在 "I am happy to born in a healthy and harmonious environment..."前面,家人介紹放在一起比較順
"Sometime, If I do something wrong," "If" should change into "if".
"I am happy to born in a healthy and harmonious environment that I have a kindness family."
"to"後要加原形動詞,這句話怪怪的!
I like to play volleyball, and read outside reading.You can change into"..,and do outside reading."
"And, sometime I will go to the library with my classmate." Behind the "And" doesn't neet the ",".
I will borrow books "form" the library. "form" should write "from".
"they would strict point out the mistakes " change to " they would strictly point out the mistakes"
" I am happy to born in a healthy and harmonious environment that I have a kindness family." could change to " I'm happy to bron in a healthy and harmonious environment, besides having a kindness family."
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