Tip for staying healthy-Draft 1
Which tips has to be possible to maintain the health?
What tips also has to be possible to let the human live the longlife also to be happy?
Because the people usually to do exercise.
Here some tips. Frist, they go outside to do exercise than stay at home.
Take some exercise everyday can stay our healthy.
Second, stay form the diet aspect, have vegetables than meat.
It can help us to reduce some diseases the occurrence.
Third, a good relieves the pressure and normal life work and rest.
We can by this tip to stay our healthy. Let ourbe happy everyday.
posted by Amanda @ 7:25 AM
7 Comments:
*Because the people usually to do exercise* should change to *Because the people usually do exercise*.
*Here some tips* should change to *Here are some tips*.
*Frist, they go outside* should change to *Frist, we go outside *.
" Which tips has "&"What tips also has " the "has" should chang into "have".
"Here some tips" should chang into "Here are some tips".
"they go outside to do exercise than stay at home." should chang into "they go outside to do exercise is better than stay at home."
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"have vegetables than meat." chang into have more vegetables than meat.
"Which tips has to be possible to maintain the health?" can change into "Which tips would be possible to maintain the health?"
" they go outside to do exercise than stay at home." should change into " It's better to go outside to do exercise than to stay at home."
"What tips also has to be possible to let the human live the *longlife also to be happy?"
*longlife should change to long life.
"Take some exercise *everyday can stay our healthy."
*everyday should change to every day.
"We can by this tip to stay our healthy." shoule be " We can use
these tips to stay healthy"
"Which tips has to be possible to maintain the health?"
& "What tips also has to be possible to let the human live the longlife also to be happy?"the "has" you have to change to "have".
" Frist, they go outside to do exercise than stay at home."you should change to "Frist, they go outside to do exercise more than stay at home."
"Take some exercise everyday can stay our healthy."
you should change "take" to "taking" or "to take".
"Let ourbe happy everyday."
you should add a space to our and be.
"Take some exercise everyday can stay our healthy.""Take" should change into "Taking".
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